My cupboard is empty;
I too lack the cloth of heaven,
But I was never taught
How dreams may be spun into thread.
I can give you nothing,
It is right and wise to leave me,
For this there is no blame;
But pray for me, that I may find
Some means of making cloth
And so be warmed at last,
Shielded as I dream.
I feel like this one would be really powerful, but I'm not sure what emotion you're trying to describe. I think this is the case with many of your poems--there's a lot of depth to them in various forms, but sometimes they're using a metaphor/imagery that refers to something....but maybe that something could be more clearly communicated?
ReplyDeleteGood job on the meter.